The sun hid behind the rounded tops
Of the green hills that stretch across
The land.
Its vibrant rays peeked through the cracks
Between the consistent hills
And the rays painted the sky.
The sun dipped low and disappeared
Carrying away its coloured rays
Along with it.
The moon bobbed up
Slowly and attained its greatest height
And illuminated the night sky.
And it shone its heart out
Quietly expressing gratitude to the more
Vibrant sun.
The sun is not one who would pilfer
All splendour to itself,
But the sun is one who shares.
The sun shines upon the moon
And its rays the moon would reflect
Casting the stars into the shadows.
The moon, oh does it wish
To once meet the sun to thank it
In person.
And oh, did the moon wonder
If the sun realised just how much
The moon appreciated the sun's munificence.
The next day, as the sun replaced the moon,
The moon took longer to set back down
And took the moment -
To stay with the sun
For a few brief hours
Hoping the sun knew what the moon implied.
The moon may never know
Never know if the sun understood
And thus, after lingering behind
It disappeared back to where it is
When we don't see it.
Nonetheless,
Whether or not the sun knows that
The moon is indebted to it,
The moon continued to feel grateful
Grateful to the sun
Quietly
Carrying the feeling
In its heart.
Oh my God Shriyan! What a fabulous imagination !! You have beautifully portrayed that meeting of sun and moon in the horizon , and moon lingering around to thank the sun! What a unique way to describe that lovely hour of the morning! The chirping of the birds and the clicking of the cicadas also join the moon in welcoming the sun , making it the most beautiful hour of the day! You have given an unparalleled example of gratitude.
ReplyDeleteI really cherish this poem da pattu kanna! You have really outdone yourself with this poem, chellam ❤️❤️❤️
Loads and loads of love to you kannama ,
Shyam Aunty
Excellent expressions of the inner feelings of a human in the poetic form and using your imagination coining trough words comparing sun and moon and ending with the message about gratitude ,
ReplyDeleteReally Shriyandhaa you are too good and talented. I thank God for gifting me wonderful grand daughter
From Pushpa Patti
Super.Congrats.
ReplyDeleteSuper di. Nicely written
ReplyDeleteGratitude says it all whether understood by the recipient or not , Gratitude pays when you show it and that is why the Moon is great in its own way, for every creation of HIS is unique and beautiful. Loved your choice of words and the array of thoughts.
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ReplyDeleteSuperb imagination. ,brought out in a neatly studded poetry. Great work. Best wishes to you Shriyandha.
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