What you knew you had right beside you
What you never knew might leave you
What you had neglected for days
What you wished was still there, within your gaze.
That miniscule amount of hope
That you feel lingering close by
You could open out your arms, embrace it,
But suddenly it's high in the sky.
Once within your grasp,
But now away from you,
Don't waste a moment on a wee gasp,
Time won't stop, and the moving hope too.
Each moment is to be caught,
Each memory to be cherished,
Hold them carefully in your arms,
Before they shall vanish.
The consistent inkling when you feel,
Something close, yet so far,
Is only because you know yourself,
That it is within your grasp, but not within your confidence.
If you're positive enough that you can hold it,
The 'it' that is mysterious and something only you know,
You can hold the precious 'it',
Clutch it tight, don't let it go.
You must be close to the end of the day,
With its cliffs and slopes and Rocky slides,
Because you knew you could make it all to the end,
And if you dream of it, you could even reach the sky.
Yes if you dream it you can reach the sky. Wonderful positive words. Gives me strength Shriyandhaa. Really your poems are with high thoughts and good message to the society. I feel proud about you. May God bless you
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Pushpa Patti
Excellent poem Shriyan kanna !!! I can see a lot of maturity in terms of idea, thought and delivery in this poem!! You truly are evolving da pattu, and it is very evident in your writings !!
ReplyDeleteHave you heard of the power of seeking ?! Positive seeking is extremely potent and more often than not, it manifests into reality. Hence, you should be very mindful about what you are seeking. Also, this is something that I’ve learnt in my life’s journey so far - there is no point in regretting anything at any given point of time. We have no control over what cards are dealt to us , but once the cards are dealt , the end result is entirely dependent on how we choose to play our cards. Life is like a game of chess - what happens in move # 22 is a result of what move you made in step # 8!! And once you’ve reached the 22nd move , there’s nothing you can do to undo any of the previous steps… so there is no point in regretting any of the choices that you made which ultimately brought you to this juncture. All you can do is , put your best foot forward from that point on!!
I can’t believe it’s a 11 year old that am posting all this for, but you keep proving that you are beyond your years !!
Keep writing , Chella kutty!! Loads of love ❤️ ❤️ ❤️
The philosophy you bring into the poem is beyond your age. Amazing.
ReplyDeleteI've a suggestion. The line running " the common feeling when you feel " sounds unpoetic. You try some other term for that " feel " or " feeling "
At this very young age , your thoughts are so matured and meaningful and your presentation is so captivating. Dream big , work towards it , definitely one can reach the goal...Great job. All the best Shriyandha
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Pushkala
Very nice and positive approach. Her writings are very matured. May God give her more and more improved writing.
ReplyDeleteKv.Revathi
Beautiful write up. Very positive and matured thoughts at this young age. God bless Shriyandha. 🥰😘🥰😘
ReplyDeleteChandra madam
Wonderful write up with full of positive thoughts. Her standard of the language is really marvellous. Keep it up dear. All the best
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Brilliant Thoughts
ReplyDeleteKeep it up.
Best Wishes....
Excellent Matured presentation
ReplyDeleteAll of us , irrespective of age, feel this regularly in our life
But we get struck up without taking up forward and lose our heart. Caution and
Advice of Shriya to all of us is to be taken rightly
Sathyanarayanan uncle
Very inspiring poem Shriyandhaa!! I always enjoy reading your poems. Keep it up!!
ReplyDeleteAs per your write up each moment and each memory to be cherished for the sake of this world in a very good humanic approach. Our wishes to you for your social awareness of writing. 👍👏👏
ReplyDeleteFine. Feeling is to be cherished . Very positive poem. Awaiting More poems from you.
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